lacrossedude987
10-06-2005, 05:23 PM
Yeah i wrote this for english and would like any help :agree:
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(Paragraph) I was staring into a bus full of soldiers, there was my uncle waving at me and my cousins and as I saw his face leave my sight I wondered, “Will I ever see him again?” He sat down in his seat and just stared out the window. He had a look on his face like I had never seen before, a look of determination and fearlessness. In the back of my mind I knew he would come home, I just knew it.
(Paragraph) We stood there on the curb. We didn’t know what to do so we just stood there. My cousins were hugging and were being cradled by my aunt’s hand. You could tell she was hurt but she knew she had to be strong for her kids.
(Paragraph) We had just been in a gym full of men who were going half across the world to defend our freedom and our country. There were young kids, the elderly, and all the in between. Everyone was there next to their soldier just staring at them not wanting them to leave even though we all knew it was reality.
(Paragraph) My uncle had tried to keep calm. He had showed us all of his equipment and his gun. He was just trying to keep all of us from thinking about him leaving. It didn’t work. You could tell by the look of my aunt’s face that she was terribly hurting inside. This was because she had already gone through this once in Desert Storm and for him to leave a second time hurt twice as bad.
(Paragraph) When his face disappeared around the corner of the cobblestone building, his face was burned into my mind. My uncle was going to fight for what was right and I felt proud of him and for what he has done. My uncle is fighting so that I can go to school everyday and be able to play outside. Things like this are not our rights, they are our privileges given to us by men like him.
(Paragraph)= Where paragraph starts
(Paragraph) I was staring into a bus full of soldiers, there was my uncle waving at me and my cousins and as I saw his face leave my sight I wondered, “Will I ever see him again?” He sat down in his seat and just stared out the window. He had a look on his face like I had never seen before, a look of determination and fearlessness. In the back of my mind I knew he would come home, I just knew it.
(Paragraph) We stood there on the curb. We didn’t know what to do so we just stood there. My cousins were hugging and were being cradled by my aunt’s hand. You could tell she was hurt but she knew she had to be strong for her kids.
(Paragraph) We had just been in a gym full of men who were going half across the world to defend our freedom and our country. There were young kids, the elderly, and all the in between. Everyone was there next to their soldier just staring at them not wanting them to leave even though we all knew it was reality.
(Paragraph) My uncle had tried to keep calm. He had showed us all of his equipment and his gun. He was just trying to keep all of us from thinking about him leaving. It didn’t work. You could tell by the look of my aunt’s face that she was terribly hurting inside. This was because she had already gone through this once in Desert Storm and for him to leave a second time hurt twice as bad.
(Paragraph) When his face disappeared around the corner of the cobblestone building, his face was burned into my mind. My uncle was going to fight for what was right and I felt proud of him and for what he has done. My uncle is fighting so that I can go to school everyday and be able to play outside. Things like this are not our rights, they are our privileges given to us by men like him.