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laxboyjt91
08-28-2006, 07:31 PM
plz read these songs and tell me which one u think sounds better

version 1

Little Johnny was sitting there
All by his lonesome self
When the cool clique passed by him
And he asked them for help

He said what can I do to be like you.
What can I do today?
What can I do to be so cool?
I wanna start today

They said if you want to be like us
Then give a cigarette a light
It’s the cool thing to do
You have nothing to lose

Now Johnny is hooked on nicotine
Nothing that he can do
The cool kids left him in the dust
They said you’re smoking’ too much

It’s the popular killer
No matter what they say
It doesn’t have a filter
You’re throwing your life away

After all that Johnny’s still not cool
Guess it was a bad mistake
Now he can’t enjoy himself
Cause he lost his smell and taste

15 years later Johnny’s all by his self
It reminds him of those days
None of the girls would go out with him
Because of his smoking ways

Johnny visited the doctor
He has to go frequently
He recently suffered a stroke
And now he has heart disease

Now Johnny is depressed now
The cigarettes take an effect
On your psychological well being
That a psychiatrist needs to inspect

It’s the popular killer
No matter what they say
It’s got no filter
You’re throwing your life away

At age 35 Johnny has cancer
Its spread all the way to his lungs
He sat there so silently
Saying how did I get it so young


It’s because he started smoking
Just to try to be cool
Well that didn’t work and it wasn’t worth
All of these problems abrew

Now Johnny’s in bed laying there dead
It all caught up to him
This all could have been avoided
If he had self confidence

All of these terrible problems
Leading to the death of this man
Could have been easily avoided
If he put down his foot

Cigarettes are not worth
All the pain that they make
Not just physical But emotional
they take you life away

More people need to stand up
And tell everybody its wrong
And people need to do the right thing
Instead of trying to be cool

It’s the popular killer
No matter what they say
It doesn’t have a filter
You’re throwing your life away

version 2

Come give it a light
Oh please just ignite it
You’ll smoke your way
To your early grave

You’re feeling so stupid
Why did you start doing this?
It’s just a waste
Of your smell and taste

It’s the popular killer
No matter what they say
It’s got no filter
You’re throwing your life away

Now you’re lying down
In the hospital downtown
The doctor looks grim
He says son your gunna leave us

You’re frozen with shock
It felt so surreal
The saddest thing is
It’s not the ironic sort of thing

It’s the popular killer
No matter what they say
It’s got no filter
You’re throwing your life away

It’s serious now
Its spread to your lungs
All this abuse
Has made them useless

Now they’re trying to find
If it’s cancerous or benign
They’re thinking
They can still save your life

It’s just too late
All that for this fate
U should have just quit
Instead of trying to fit in to that “crowd”

It’s the popular killer
No matter what they say
It’s got no filter
You’re throwing your life away

ant1216d
08-28-2006, 07:36 PM
It sounds like some weird song that would be on one of like the old movies they show in health class

atacklax
08-28-2006, 07:37 PM
They're both very dark. But I think if you made it more of a song and less of a list of things smoking does to you it would be good.

H-townlaxer
08-28-2006, 07:39 PM
copenhagen what a wad of flavor
copenhagen you can see it in my smile
copenhagen do you self a favor chewwww
copenhagen drive them pretty girls wild

Attackalltheway
08-28-2006, 07:52 PM
That was kinda weird to me cuz my name is johnny

H-townlaxer
08-28-2006, 08:07 PM
That was kinda weird to me cuz my name is johnny


the real queston is do you smoke?

mass_elite21
08-28-2006, 08:10 PM
im sorry, but those songs are really lame. i hope thats for a health class or something, because if thats the only kind of song you can write....wow.

A-D-I-D-A-S
08-28-2006, 08:22 PM
They're not really songs more like a poem ABCB

GarysGod
08-28-2006, 08:52 PM
it would be very diificult to make that list into a song that sounded good, and if you did it would sound like a horrible country song.

laxboyJZ11
08-29-2006, 10:35 AM
it would be very diificult to make that list into a song that sounded good, and if you did it would sound like a horrible country song.

i was just thinking the same thing. it sounds like it would be a lame contry song

tiplax
08-29-2006, 10:59 AM
i'm not gonna lie, thoose tyrics were terrible. they were creative and very anti-drugs but no one would want to listen to them at a concert or on their iPod.
i could be wrong thought depending on the music

holyschnikes101
08-29-2006, 11:04 AM
I stopped when you rhymed today with today.

Laxislife11
08-29-2006, 11:41 AM
that was awful sorry

Teo
08-29-2006, 07:53 PM
Lol, That was possibly the worst 2 songs I've ever heard, even worse than Rico Suave.

Attackalltheway
08-30-2006, 03:14 PM
the real queston is do you smoke?
...no and i never will:grin: